Classmate Response 2, Week 3

In response to : David's Free Entry
"Is this show still on?" She took her seat next to him on the old couch.
"Apparently. Man, I used to watch this all the time." His eyes weren't focused; he wasn't really watching the TV.
Pulling him out of his daydream, she leaned onto his shoulder.
"Remember the time someone said I reminded them of Sheldon?"
"Yeah, they're crazy. There's no way anyone could be like him."
"I guess it sort of makes sense, though. I think a lot."
"Not like him. He's neurotic, and I like being around you. He's the kind of person I think I'd only like on TV."
"Are you saying that if I acted like him, you wouldn't like me?"
He turned his head to the window. It's a normal day outside, the sun's heat was reaching the Earth as usual. She's not testing me is she? That's not like her. But she is a girl, I should pick my answer carefully, he thought.
"... Pretty much." He smiled a shy smile, and his eyes were less than confident in that answer.

Neither of them paid the show much mind. Her eyes looked at the screen while she watched the memories of past conversations about how she was or wasn't like Sheldon.
He had already seen this episode. Sometimes he would mouth a line before a character said it.

After a pause.
"Was that the right answer?"
She laughed. She smiled, and scooted closer to him.
Oh thank God. He thought.

I think this is a good start.

What I like: The concept. I have one in my head about American Idol and How I met Your Mother.I've been meaning to get them down...

I like the introduction and how normal the couple appears. It reminds me that with good writing, people can be regular people and the story can still be interesting. The "tone meter" is right in the middle. I also like the line about how he looks out the wondow and the sun's heat "reaching the Earth as usual." I thoght I was about to run into a cliche but the character just brushes it off as a mundane thing which gives the reader a little more insight into the character. Personally, I liked the timing and the length.

What can be improved: I want to know more about the particular episode and the possible parallels between the character on tv and the girl in real life. If you inject more descritions of the show  think it would round out the story nicely. Just my opinion!

Thanks for sharing :)