Calisthenics, Wk7
In class
on Thursday we did an assignment were a student was asked a bunch of random
questions about her childhood in Chicago and we as a class took down notes on
her answers, some were simple and some of her answers were completely out there.
From there we had to write a short draft with her answers and this is
mine:
The pegs are all knit into the rug as she tries to make another star-like pattern. The close space between the glowing pegs remind her of the short distance between her ghost town and the Wasco candy store, a yellow and not yet ripe orange color warming her hands. From behind she can feel the cat's sly eyes goring into her human frame. As she silently wishes for the cat to die by the cold tangled silver coils of a slinkey, she sister plunges a royal blue peg up into the unknown space of her nose.
The pegs are all knit into the rug as she tries to make another star-like pattern. The close space between the glowing pegs remind her of the short distance between her ghost town and the Wasco candy store, a yellow and not yet ripe orange color warming her hands. From behind she can feel the cat's sly eyes goring into her human frame. As she silently wishes for the cat to die by the cold tangled silver coils of a slinkey, she sister plunges a royal blue peg up into the unknown space of her nose.
"in medias res", or "into the middle of things"; this describes a popular narrative technique of starting in the middle of a story, in the midst of action - not at the beginning. This is what I like about your piece. I feel like there is a backstory or something that happened before she lays pegs into the rug..perhaps we'll get to see what happened before this moment later in the piece if you continue working on it.