From Taylor's interrogation
One half-hour outside retiree town, between not-yet-ripe orange lizards and tangled slinkies
The Lady Across the Street sells cereal and candy from behind the dusty counter of the corner store.
She squints and tries to bring the light-bright dreams of her youth back to life, like she did for that kitten just that one time -
holding a tangerine to the sky she imagines herself there, on a unknown planet. Planet Elgin,
where 9 year olds kids run the Dairy Queen and old ladies with pukish yellow skin play football.
This is a great draft! I love the first line about the lizards and slinkies. How you incorporated the bringing back to life part of Taylor's answers is awesome. And "Planet Elgin" is great, I never would have thought about doing something like that, but it really does sound like a planet. I enjoy the whole image of this draft and it makes it ever better knowing what little time we had to craft these!
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